Pup

Here is my submission for Critique.
It is a Juniperus procumbens nana.
It is 43cms high (17in ) in the bunjing style.
I have been training this tree for 7 years I had a set back 3 years ago, it was attacked by Phoma, a fungus that attacks the new growth.
Which means that it cannot develop properly thus leaving it susceptible to insect attack. I treated it with a cooper sulphate fungicide. It worked.
Now it has recovered. I hope this information helps any body who is having similar troubles with this species. Pup

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G, day I live in western Australia I have been trying for the last 20+ years with some success to grow Bonsai. I am a perpetual learner and an advanced beginner

Selena

I feel the top (one) and bottom two pads might be cut back in the interests of symmetry and neatness, but then how important are those latter to you?

JLDoggett

I like the overall look of this tree. The foliage looks healthy, and the movement of the trunk is very classical, even the lower jins fit into the overall scheme of the design (I am not at all partial to jins). The upper jin is a little long to my eye and somewhat distracting (it might make more visual sense in person). The only other thing I would consider, were it mine, would be to thing the center foliage just a little so the eye can follow the trunk into the branching. Right now my eye stops at the first clump of foliage and then dissappears. I like to see the structure of a tree and right now I can not tell where that upper-most clump of foliage attaches. Visually it almost floats above the tree.

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akeppler

This is a spectacular trunk and line. It's too bad that massive crown of foliage drasticly out of balance with the trunk destroys what might otherwise be a worldclass literati.

I see an 80 percent reduction in foliage centered over the base at soil line emergence. This virtual may have branches wherethere are none. It is just an illustration to convey an idea. Just more simplistic in design.

Best regards, Al

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bonsaikc

Al, I couldn't disagree with you more. I think this tree has a dyamism in its design thea is comepletely lost by moving the crown to be centered over the nebari like that. I want to see it thinned, wired, and arranged before I would suggest removing anything.

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akeppler

Well...at least now we have some opinions.......

centaura

I'm not sure I'm in for a drastic reduction in foliage, but I do agree that I think it would look more literati-like with less foliage. Or, to put it the other way, for that much foliage I'd like to see a thicker trunk.

-Centaura

anttal63

nice one pup first post for you nice to be here. i see it some where in here.

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Pup

G, day folks thank you for your in put. I have been reading them with interest. One thing I forgot to mention in my original post was, that when the tree suffered from the Phoma attack it was almost devoid of foliage. I will do some thinning and wiring when the weather cools. At the moment we in the west of Australia are experiencing some rather warm days and nights. In the high 30s to low 40s day nights in the 23--24 Celsius. Again thank you Pup.
Ps where are the other trees in BTM and critique

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Phil

Antonio, really cant tell much from your picture as you posted it as a thumbnail image.....much too small. Other than that, welcome aboard!
Always nice to see another Aussie here!

~Phil

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